Writing The Perfect Horror Scripts & Novel

Hello, Everyone.

I have recently finished critiquing several thriller and horror theme screenplays and a horror theme novel for several writers. If you are writing a script or book in these genres, I have some advice for you. If you want the story to have a strong impact on the reader, you must make a strong emotional and psychological connection to the reader. If the main character is the villain or is going to do something desperate, create personal situations that give a strong emotional build up for the characters right before they commit their desperate act. Doing this pulls the readers sympathy and draws the reader into the main characters’ minds and emotions. Even though the act they do is wrong, the reader feels the understanding why the character does it.

The best example I have of this technique is the Japanese anime Hell Girl. I suggest watching the series. Keep a note pad and pen at hand to take notes. Horror stories and thriller stories never go out of style.

Overview
Hell Girl: Two Mirrors has some of the most soul crushing, despair inducing stories I've ever watched. The format reminds me a bit of a series like the Twilight Zone in that each episode has a fresh story with new characters. With only Hell Girl and her companions returning as side characters in each episode. Also while this is second season knowledge of the events of the first season is unnecessary. I would highly recommend this series if you enjoy drama or just want to try something different. The stories are solid and I think you'll find yourself sympathizing with the lead character in each story.

Premise
If you have a grudge against someone, I mean really bare a deep and meaningful grudge against, you can gain access to The Hell Correspondence website. The website simply requests the name of the person who has wronged you. After entering the name you are given the opportunity to enter into a contract with Hell Girl where by your target is taken to immediately to Hell. Usually some sort of Poetic Justice is dished out on the way. The cost of this service is your own soul when you die.

Episode Format
Each episode presents a new character who has been completely cornered. Everything that could go wrong in the characters circumstances has gone wrong. And there is generally one malicious person behind it for them. Finding themselves unable to resolve the issue on their own they contact Hell Girl. At which point their lives typically are shown to improve. 

Closing Thoughts
This season is not without its flaws as the final story bends and breaks the rules of the series in order to create a ludicrous story about the Hell Correspondence being abused.

Click on the two links below to watch the Hell Girl Series

http://www.crunchyroll.com/hell-girl-two-mirrors/videos

There are three seasons of Hell Girl. All three seasons can be views at the following link.

http://www.animehere.com/anime/jigoku-shoujo.html

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Writing Screenplay Dialogue

The paradox of great dialogue is that it sounds so real, yet it is clearly not ordinary language. Here are some essential elements of great screenplay dialogue.

How do writers create sharp, witty speech for their characters? There are some fundamentals which need to be grasped in order to boost one's dialogue-writing powers.

The most important thing to keep in mind about screen dialogue is that less is more. Cinema is a language spoken in images. Dialogue should be used sparingly and as a last resort, after a visual, active picture has been painted on the page which tells the story. Characters should only speak when absolutely necessary and even then it should be sparse, leaving much to the imagination.

Say the right words for your role.

When we do let the characters talk, every word must work hard. Dialogue has four essential functions in a screenplay: conveying character, moving the story forward, expressing subtext, and entertaining the audience.

Conveying Character

Dialogue must reveal character. This means that every line has to resonate with the person who says it. The flavor of their background should be captured in their word choices, and the syntax (arrangement of words) should be uniquely theirs.

For example, Harry Callahan's “Go ahead, make my day,” would never be uttered by Scarlett O'Hara’s maid , Prissy, nor would Callahan be likely to say, “I don’t know nothing bout birthin' no babies." Every person has their own unique world view, background, attitudes and personality quirks, and these should inform the things they say as well as the way they say it.

It helps to think about where the character is from – East or West Coast? The South? Europe? How do people talk from that region? Listening to examples can help with hearing the cadence of that particular type of speech. Next, think about the character as an individual. What is his or her educational background? What economic class are they in? Are they creative? Logical? Even-tempered? Or emotional?

Once you have a very clear definition for this character, their dialogue will naturally come out sounding like them and only them. Keep a clear vision of your character’s unique traits in mind when you draft their dialogue, and again when you revise and polish it. In the later stages of revision, a writer can feel where the dialogue is smooth and where it is still awkward and doesn’t quite do its job.

Moving the Story Forward

Well-written dialogue also imperceptibly serves the purpose of moving the story forward, by having the characters say something which leads to something happening. Either a decision is made, a question is asked, information is revealed, but in one way or another, a cause effect relationship between the dialogue spoken and the next actions taken is felt. This is one way the plot advances smoothly, with a logical flow and an engaging dose of momentum.

Expressing Subtext

Let's talk.

Third, dialogue should always contain subtext. Another way to think about this is that characters should never say exactly what they mean. This leads to dialogue that is too “on the nose,” to use the jargon of the industry. Irony and subtext are essential. Think of Thelma and Louise at the end of that movie. Thelma simply says, “Let’s keep goin’” and Louise says, “Are you sure?” and Thelma says “Yeah.” What we see is that they’re at the edge of a huge cliff with the cops behind them. What we hear would mean nothing without the image. But within that image, it speaks volumes. The text is the words on the surface, but the subtext is the meaning beneath those words, in the context of the images we see and the storyline up to that point.

Entertaining the Audience

Finally, dialogue needs to evoke a visceral response and engage the audience. With only two hours of screen time, every second counts, and the writer cannot afford to leave one dull line in. Whether it’s a funny line, a mysterious line, a poignant line, or a frightening one, make sure the line has some entertainment value. It needs to move the audience emotionally, evoking intrigue, humor, sadness, fear, or some other strong feeling, or it will fail to engage the audience.

The secret to successful dialogue might seem mysterious, but there are actually some basic guidelines a writer can follow to help create unforgettable screenplay lines.

Selected Script: Glengarry Glen Ross
David Mamet Shows How It's Done



There are movies with great dialogue, and then there are movies written by David Mamet, which exist in a class all their own. Mamet got his start writing plays, where snappy dialogue, not special effects, is what keeps butts in seats. Mamet's Glengarry Glen Ross, which he adapted form his Pulitzer Prize-winning play, is wall-to-wall great dialogue. The characters in this script grab your attention with their rapid fire speech patterns and don't let go until the last scene. Please click on the title of the script and read it. It is an excellent example of writing great dialog. Remember that the best way of learning is from seeing the real thing.

  

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 Includes evaluating the basis elements of a script

•  Introduction
•  Development
•  Climax
•  Conclusion
• Character development 
•  Mid point development

Critiques also provide suggestions for improvements and enhancement. 

Payments are made by Paypal or cashier check by mail.


Other services are at regular price.

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Ask the Expert: Making Sure Your Subplots Aren’t Sub-Par

Question: How many subplots should I have and how do I make them work with the overall story?

A man can’t live on ‘A’ storylines alone – and neither can your scripts. If you’re not crafting and interweaving compelling subplots and B stories into your script, your story will probably feel flat and won’t sustain for 100 minutes.

Your subplots and B stories are what add new dimensions to your script and flesh out your concept and story. Most stories have at least 2 or 3 subplots, and can have more. But you don’t want them to take AWAY from the main storyline, only add to it!

The first 8-10 pages of your second act is where your main character will face their first major test or challenge and take the first step in their arc. But these pages are also where you should begin introducing and developing your subplots and B stories. Somewhere in pgs 30-40ish.

It’s a fuzzy area, but I actually think there are some differences between a B-STORY and a SUBPLOT. I think B stories usually still directly involve your main character, whereas subplots do not – at least not initially.

The B Story is your character’s secondary motivation or mission – the OTHER thing they have to accomplish. Your B Story may be a second problem or issue that your main character has to fix. And while your A-Story presents itself at the inciting incident and is solidified at the end of the first act with the acceptance of the adventure, your B-Story often can’t be identified UNTIL the second act begins, because it’s what is illuminated by the adventure beginning.

For example, in The Wizard of Oz – Dorothy’s A-Story is to find the Wizard and get home, but the B-Story becomes helping Oz and her new friends. She had no idea she was going to have to do that until the adventure began.

The B Story is often the more emotional thing, and not the visual, tangible, action-y thing. It’s connected to your concept – but is usually caused because of or caused by your concept. It’s what your hook or major storyline leads your characters to (or to do).

For example, in the political comedy Dave, the main storyline is Kevin Kline pretending to be the President and getting away with it while adapting to his very new life as the leader of the free world. But there are two B stories – or perhaps B and C story – the first is the love story with the First Lady. The second B story, perhaps the C story, is that Dave must get this bill passed to save children and cut the budget.

In my company’s own movie, Sydney White, the B story is how Amanda Bynes’s Sydney character affects and helps the “Dorks” characters. She’s still involved, so it’s not really a subplot. It’s a true secondary storyline.

Your B Story could be a love story for your main character (though in a straight romantic comedy, this would always be the A story). Very often, in action or disaster films, the B story is the love story, but it can be in any genre.

Some examples where the B story is the love story include Juno (love story with Michael Cera), Liar Liar (love story with Maura Tierney and winning his wife back is a second mission and motivation to overcoming the issue of not being able to lie), Twister, Armageddon, 2012, Die Hard, etc – all have B love stories.

In contrast, your subplots are basically a way for you to cut away from your main storylines and main characters and infuse different life and personality into your story. These subplots do NOT have to include your main characters, and probably shouldn’t. However, it usually does and SHOULD intersect and affect your major plotline at some point.

It could be your sidekick, best friend, mentor character or antagonist that you’ve introduced us to in the first act, now develops their own slightly separate storyline and goals. Or it could be a totally NEW character that you introduce here.

Your subplots actually can cause or lead to your turning points in your second act if they intersect well with your major storylines.  For instance, in The Ref, the two subplots are the son’s storyline and the Drunken Santa storyline. They eventually intersect and affect the main storyline of Denis Leary and the parents, but they are separate.

In thrillers like Primal Fear, The Negotiator, or Long Kiss Goodnight, the subplots are the behind the scenes politics or overarching stories of corruption, dirty cops, revenge, business, etc. that affect and help drive the main action. In Primal Fear, there’s a real estate subplot that leads to discovery of clues that intersect with the main storyline, but it’s just a subplot and doesn’t directly involve the main characters.

Or the subplot could be the OTHER side of your love story. For example, in Six Days 7 Nights, the major storyline is Anne Heche and Harrison Ford’s love story developing as they try to get rescued, but the subplot is their respective boyfriends/girlfriends back on the mainland as they get closer.

Remember – much like your main ‘A’ storyline, your B stories and subplots should have a set up, a beginning, middle and end – they need a structure – and they need to be resolved. This is done usually by the end of your second act or middle of your third act – but it depends on how big and important the subplot is.

Your B story – your character’s secondary missions – they have to include obstacles just like the A story does. And your subplot MUST have conflict – or else it is not a subplot, it’s just filler! I’ll say that again – if your subplot has no conflict, it’s just filler.

The subplot must also connect with your story’s main theme. In fact, the subplot often drives home the theme even more specifically and obviously than your A storyline. Look at Crazy Stupid Love – had tons of storylines and subplots, but even the smaller subplots of Steve Carrell’s kid’s love life and the funny angry neighbors all added to, and brought out, the theme of the story.

If you have a true ensemble piece – meaning there is pretty equal screen time shared amongst 5-10 different characters, then you don’t need subplots because each of your characters will have their own storyline and those will be more than enough to use to cut away from whatever else is going on, and progress the story. Basically, your whole story is made up of subplots that tie into an overarching concept, story or theme. For example – Crash, Love Actually, New Year’s Eve, Traffic, etc.  But keep in mind that many of these storylines should intersect in some way at some point just like your subplots would.

And if you have created a wonderful subplot on page 32 and introduced new characters, but then we don’t see them again until page 83, then you haven’t tracked that subplot well enough and it will not seem important enough to the story. After your major structural points or turning points, that’s usually a great time to cut away from your main characters and check back in with your subplots.

So as you develop your script, make sure you’re creating and tracking subplots and B stories that are just as compelling as your major storyline so that your concept, hook and theme truly shine.

Danny Manus is an in-demand script consultant and CEO of No BullScript Consulting, and author of “No B.S. for Screenwriters: Advice from the Executive Perspective.” Ranked one of the Top 15 “Cream of the Crop” script consultants in CS Magazine in 2010, he was previously the Director of Development for Clifford Werber Productions (Cinderella Story, Sydney White) and Sandstorm Films (The Covenant, 8MM2), which had a first look deal at Screen Gems. He is also attached to produce several projects independently, is a columnist for Business of Show Institute, and teaches seminars and workshops all across the country. 

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•  Introduction
•  Development
•  Climax
•  Conclusion
• Character development 
•  Mid point development

Critiques also provide suggestions for improvements and enhancement. 

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Other services are at regular price.

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Adapting A Screenplay from Literature

By Michael Rabiger

There is a constantly growing supply of plays, novels, and short stories that might adapt well to the screen. Good literature can however be a quicksand if you assume that the story will make an equally fine film. Effective adaptation may actually be impossible if you can find no cinematic equivalent for the author’s writing style and literary form. A story that relies on a subtly ironic storytelling voice, for instance, might be a bad choice because there is no such thing as ironic photography or recording.

Most of the criteria for judging material for an adaptation remain the same as those used to assess any script:

• Does it tell its tale through externally visible, behavioral means?
• Does it have interesting, well-developed characters?
• Is it contained, specific, and affordable in its settings?
• Are the situations interesting and realizable?
• Is there an interesting major conflict, and is it externally dramatized rather than internal?
• Does the conflict imply interesting metaphors?
• Does the piece have a strong thematic purpose?
• Can you wholeheartedly identify with its theme?
• Can you invent a cinematic equivalency for the story’s literary values?
• Can you afford to do it?
• Is the copyright available?

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Screenplays

Critique: $50.00 Flat Fee, Discount fee $42.50

 Includes evaluating the basis elements of a script

•  Introduction
•  Development
•  Climax
•  Conclusion
• Character development 
•  Mid point development

Critiques also provide suggestions for improvements and enhancement. 

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Other services are at regular price.

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Editing: $45.00 Flat Fee

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