Example Of A Bad Query Letter

Hello everyone,

Someone sent me this query letter they found. Never send a letter like this to agents.


Dear Editor,

Enclosed is a copy of my new volume of poetry Lyrical Inspirations. I put a great amount of blood, sweat and tears into these poems!

And, while we're on the subject of blood, sweat and tears, you may have heard of my cousins, Gino and Marcello, sometimes known as "the poetry goons."

I was yakking with them yesterday, and they told me that it would be real nice if you published 1000 free copies of Lyrical Inspirations perfect bound on the highest quality paper stock with a beautiful glossy cover including a drawing by an artist with an international reputation.

They said that if you had a different opinion that they'd come on over and have a little talk.

So, thanks in advance. I'll expect the finished books next week.

Yours in Art!

Freddy Gotti

A letter like this is a totally big no no!

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